Its been a long time since she
pleased a man
Teased a man
Made him feel
Real good
Like only she could
She craves
She hungers
For a taste
Of his
Flesh
Dark
Wet
With
sweat
Pressed
Against
Her breast
Just a bite
Is all she'd like
A little taste
A nibble
A lick
Better get in the shower
Real quick!
Again, it would be much more powerful in first person voice. replace the "she" with "I" and everyone can put themself in the place of the voice. Third person voice observes. Firt person LIVES the experience.
ReplyDeleteA little racey for me but very well written. I could almost feel the touch.
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