To hot to sleep
Pen to paper
See what comes
Out of me
Lots on my mind
All unorganized
Feeling lost
About what's inside
This poem is about me
Feeling things I never
thought Would be
Anger and rage
Wish it would go away.
I want to let it go
cause God says so
It hard you see
Anger is in me
started as a irritating flame
Some what easy to tame
It was only put to rest
Sure I failed this test
Like a smoldering coal
Waiting for the wind
It comes back to life
Only to plague my life
Sometimes I don't care
Tired of being angry
I look elsewhere
For
What
I
don't
Know
Wish
This
Anger
Would
Go
The last two lines of stanza seven are redundant. One of the lines needs to have a word other than "life". Maybe "re-ignite" in line 3. Or, strife instead of life in line 4? There are many possibilities. If you repeat the same word that closely together (especially as the end rhyme) your work will read as boring. With the exception of this word choice you wrote a very good poem. I love the methaphoric use of weather (physical heat) for emotion (the hot anger within).
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