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Saturday, July 3, 2010

Twist

Can you help how you feel?
Seems like the real deal
But its to soon to know
Your true colors will show
When they do, I'll see the real you
Wonder if I will feel the same
This inferno of a flame
Burns so deep
It hurts
It feels so good
Never knew pain like this
With a twist

3 comments:

  1. Very interesting and I have been there so many times.. Folks always reveal the real after awhile. Thats why its cool just to watch and take note, and stay in control of your feelings. Great job Victoria

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  2. I like this a lot. It is well written and very easy to relate to. The ending reminds me of my own style. One grammatical suggestion, a flame can not be an inferno. flaming inferno, or inferno of inferno of flames would work. Using an adjective followed by inferno would be the strongest approach. I will probably feature this one as a guest poet joint on my blog

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  3. If you watch and wait the true colors of someone's character always comes out. Sometimes after it's too late.

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